Butterfly Dream: Migrating Birds Haiku by Marta Chocilowska
English Original
migratory birds
the summer cottage's key
under the doormat
Sponsor's Award, 2016 ITO EN Oi Ocha New Haiku Contest
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
一群候鳥
夏天度假小屋的鑰匙
在門墊下面
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
一群候鸟
夏天度假小屋的钥匙
在门垫下面
Butterfly Dream 27.07.2018
Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐comment:
The contrast between two kinds of migratory behaviors described in the haiku is fresh and thought-provoking.
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2018-01-19
sleigh ride / kulig hokku
sleigh ride
the road ahead shimmers
in moonlight
kulig
skrzy się droga przed nami
w świetle księżyca
Lorin Ford says: This hokku has enchanted me since I first read it. Sleigh rides (kulig) in Poland have a long history of tradition and to this day are a celebratory outing for locals and tourists alike. Thank you, Marta, for taking me there. I can imagine being on this moonlit sleigh ride, gliding through the countryside, all rugged up and warm in the fresh open air, seeing the white breath of the sturdy little horses, hearing the muffled sound of their hoof beats in the snow, the sounds of their well-polished harness, tinkling harness bells and a snort now and then. I imagine chatting sometimes with my fellow passengers as we glide through the crisp air and the indescribable scent of snow, but mostly just feeling the exhilaration and excitement of being there. And the anticipation! What lies ahead on this shimmering road of snow?
Metaphorically, it’s the rest of our renku that lies ahead. Marta Chocilowska’s hokku invites us all along for the ride. Very nicely done, Marta.
Historically, the hokku was written by the most important guest, (i.e. usually, the Renku Master) and the wakiku was written by the host (i.e. the one who supplies the venue, the snacks, and the booze.) Only when we have the hokku and wakiku in place can we say the renku party has truly begun.
Sleigh Ride A Jūnicho Renku
Mann Library’s Daily Haiku, Nov. 18, 2019
2017-03-03
cherry blossoms / kwitnące wiśnie
cherry blossoms ...
even the moon
turns pink
kwitnące wiśnie ...
nawet księżyc jest lekko
zaróżowiony
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
櫻花盛開 ...
就連月亮
也變成粉紅色
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
樱花盛开...
就连月亮
也变成粉红色
Comment by Chen-ou Liu: L1 sketches a cherry blossoms scene while Marta's use of hyperbole in Ls 2&3 enhances the beauty and mood of L1.
Butterfly Dream Sept. 25, 2020
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