pod wycieraczką 鳥渡るマットの下の小屋の鍵 tori wataru matto no shita no koya no kagi translated by Naotaka Uematsu (Hanseki)
ptice selice
ključ ljetne kolibe
ispod otirača
(tłum. Tomislav Maretic)
The 27th ITO EN Oi Ocha New Haiku Contest 2016 spośród 17 825 nadesłanych haiku nagrodę sponsora - Sponsor's Award - przyznaną przez Haiku International Association - otrzymało moje haiku - jestem pierwszą Polką nagrodzoną w tym konkursie.
The poem does not need kireji since it frames a meaningful story whose meaning skids by itself, unexpectedly, from a practical matter to a symbolical, almost exemplary, result. The characteristic charm and tension of the poem consists in a contextual ellipsis whose hint is only given with its last word. The hard work (done by just one individual or perhaps by us all) turns out to be a kind of escape, release, patient purification of the water which reflects the blue sky. Piece by piece, as a result of our labour, the sky changes the backwater’s colour.
comment by Corneliu Traian ATANASIU, President of the Jury